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Last Moment With Dashie by BlackGryph0n

Say whatever you want about My little pony"It's girly,it's for kids,brony this,brony that"I have to say fuck those people cause if a sh...


Where do I start? This story is...stupid,laughably bad,and most of all disappointing in my opinion because...wow,okay so Jane was creat...

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Last Moment With Dashie by BlackGryph0n
Say whatever you want about My little pony"It's girly,it's for kids,brony this,brony that"I have to say fuck those people cause if a show like that can inspire someone to write this fanfic turned movie then they are doing something better than anything you will ever do...This scene here...I both love it and hate it...Why? I love how...what can I say that's already been said? "Good" isn't enough to describe this movie but I will call it a masterpiece cause it made me feel regret for not getting into the show...I was one of those people that would just laugh at how Boys and even grown men love this show but I'll admit being curious I saw some funny moments and found myself laughing...I started to like the characters...I thought that this fandom was...great! I mean wow and I'm a guy that grew up on dragon ball Z and power rangers and I was loving these talking ponies getting into funny situations that brought a smile to someone like me but I know it's not perfect because well...Cupcakes,rainbow factory,and smile hd...Geez,people are turning this cute show into a gore show or into torture porn hell happy tree friends would tell you to cool it but I know nothing's perfect...except this story but I will say why I hate this story...It made me cry...Yup,made me cry,make fun of me all you want,I don't regret loving this and shedding tears cause it was fantastic,it was perfect,it was a fucking masterpiece and...its my favorite story...I want say that this will be my all time favorite story...This is my all time favorite story...but seriously I will measure every story up to this one,it's that good and this scene and what rainbow dash says at the end...Goddammit...My point is this is a masterpiece and instead of reading this you should watch this movie and/or read the fanfic in conclusion I love this story,I wish I could one day be as good of a writer as the people who worked on this,I want to give it 1000000 out of 1000000 and even higher,I can't stress this enough,watch this movie,read the fanfic...I promise it will be worth it
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"Make a move and I'll kill you"
Johnny froze when he heard the voice from behind him and metal being pushed on his back,he was going home from the store and it was late at night so it was no surprise that he would get mugged
"Oh god"Johnny whispers making sure not to make any sudden movements 
"God isn't here...just me"The voice said behind him
"L-Look,j-just take whatever you want but p-please don't kill me"Johnny whimpered
He felt metal pointed at his head
"You feel that? That's a 9mm pistol pointed at your head,all I have to do is pull the trigger so don't bother running away,got it?"Said the person behind him pushing the gun to his temple 
Johnny nodded quickly,tears coming out of his eyes
"Good boy,now we're going for a ride"The person pushes Johnny to a black car still pointing his pistol at him
"L-Look just take my money an-"Johnny was cutoff by a clicking sound
"Sorry I just took the safety off my gun,what were you saying?"The person said
Johnny didn't say anything but cry
"Oh,nothing to say? Good,now it's going to be a long drive so take a nap and I'll wake you up when we're there"
Johnny was about to say something but was hit in the back of the head,Johnny was on the ground,before losing consciousness all he saw were two red orbs looking down at him
Hours later
Johnny woke up to find himself in the dark and felt he was moving
"W-Wher-"Johnny was cutoff by a sudden stop in movement and hit his back hard
"Ngh"Johnny rubbed his back but before he could wonder what's going on he heard footsteps then suddenly a bright light came forcing Johnny to cover his eyes
"Rise and shine"Said a cold voice 
Johnny looked up to see a young man,he had pale skin,white hair that covered his left eye,and red eyes,he then looked up and saw a trunk door,he was in the trunk of a car for who knows how long,was he being kidnapped? Did this young man who looked like he was in his early twenties kidnap him? but why he wasn't anybody important,he had money but wasn't rich,so many questions rushed through his head until he looked at the young mans red orbs.
Johnny  remembered those eyes and he remembers what happened 
"Y-You're-"Before Johnny could say anything the young man grabbed Johnny by his collar and forced him out of the trunk and threw him to the ground,Johnny looked up and saw where he was and he paled 
"Remember this place Johnny?"The young man said walking towards him
Johnny looked around,no,he doesn't know this place but what he does know is that no one was there,no one to cry for help it was just Johnny and the young man
The young man took out a cigarette and lit it
Johnny looked at the young man with a worried expression
The young man took a drag of his cigarette 
"You don't remember do you?"He asked 
All Johnny could do was shake his head with tears coming out of his eyes
"I thought so but she didn't forget"The young man said taking another drag of his cigarette 
Johnny was confused
"S-She?"Johnny stutters
The young man walked to Johnny and grabs him by the neck
"You don't even have the decency to remember the girl you killed? That's just rude"The young man stabbed the cigarette on Johnny's head making him scream in agony 
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!"Johnny screamed in agony feeling the burn on his head and the young man driving it into his head made it worse 
"Not so tough when you're not dealing with a little girl,Huh!?"The young man yelled kneeing him in the face
Johnny fell on his back holding his face writhing in pain
"You know,I hate people like you,you commit a crime and you walk off free and act like nothing's happened,like you can just wipe the slate clean and all will be forgiven and the people you hurt will just get over it"The young man said looking
Johnny still holding his face in pain looked at the young man
"W-Why?"Johnny said weakly
The young man looked at him
"Why?"The young man said tilting his head
The young man grabbed Johnny from the back of his head and slammed it on the concrete 
"THIS IS WHERE YOU KILLED HER,WHERE YOU MOLESTED HER AND LEFT HER TO DIE LIKE AN ANIMAL!!!!"The young man yelled full of rage while driving Johnny's head into the concrete 
"I-I didn-"Johnny was cutoff
"YES YOU DID!!!"The young man picked up Johnny's head so he could look at him in the eye
"You killed her because she told on you,she told told her parents what you did and you killed her"The young man said
"N-No I-I..."Johnny couldn't say anything,what could he say? Here he is face to face with someone who really wants to hurt him but why? Why? Johnny thought what has he done to deserve this,he was a good guy not perfect but still a good guy and now he's been threatened at gun point,kidnapped,and now is getting beaten up because of Sa-
Johnny's eyes widened 
The young man saw this
"It's coming back isn't it?"The young man said letting go of Johnny's head
Johnny began to remember but something inside him didn't want him too,Johnny turned to the young man and saw something behind him,was he seeing things? No,there was something there and deep down Johnny knew what it was
"What was her name?"The young man said pulling out his pistol
Johnny was still looking behind him,eyes widening as whatever it was began to take shape,a human shape
"I-I don't-"
*BANG*
"AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!"
The young man shot Johnny's leg
"What.was.her.name?"The young man said slowly
Johnny was in more pain than he could ever imagine,he tried to crawl away but...
*BANG*
He was shot in the arm 
The young man grabbed the back of Johnny's head
"What's her name?"The young man whispered 
Johnny was in pain he couldn't believe this was happening,what did he do? What little girl? Why? Why was this happening? All because she couldn't keep her mouth shu-
Johnny's eyes widened and in the corner of his eye the blur started to become clear,it was a girl...a little girl no older then seven years old,she had brown curly hair that reached her shoulders,forest green eyes,and a pink tattered night gown with something stitched to it
*BANG*
The young man shot him in the back letting him fall on the ground and points the gun at Johnny temple 
"Say it"The young man whispers getting impatient 
Johnny couldn't hear anything he just looked at the girl and he started to remember
"Sa...lly"Johnny said
Yes,Sally was her name,the little girl he molested and killed,that was ten years ago and forgot all of it,everything that happened...everything he's done and there she was looking at him with tears of blood coming out of her eyes
*BANG*
The young man shot Johnny in the head finally ending his misery,so much blood surrounded his body and his eyes now lifeless and unblinking still staring at the innocent girl he killed because of what he's done to her and this young man came to avenge that little girl and made him suffer before he killed him and the young man got what he wanted he killed Johnny in front of Sally at the same place Johnny killed her...in the end no matter how far you run,no matter where you hide,no one can escape justice.



Story based on creepypasta Play with me by Kiki-hyuga
Thank you for taking the time to read my story and I hope you enjoyed it,tell me what you think of it and be honest








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"This is it"The young man said parking his car in front of an abandoned mansion in the woods,it was dark outside and quiet,The young man pulls out a picture from the passenger seat and looks at it

"A face only a mother would love"The young man put the picture in his pocket and pulled a pistol out and checked his ammo 

"I have a feeling this isn't going to be easy...then again what is?"The young man put the ammo clip back in the gun and gets out of his car then closed the door

"Time to get to work"He pulls out his gun ready to fire and kicked open the door only to find...nothing

"Hrmmm"The young man walked into the house still with his gun drawn and pulled a flashlight then turned it on

The young man looked around the house,it looked worse than the outside,the smell of piss and shit reached his nose,all you could find was graffiti,broken floorboards,cobwebs,puddles of piss,and shit

"A piece of shit hiding in a shithole...this should be easy"The young man mumbled still searching the house

The young man went to what used to be a kitchen,not exactly as worse as the entrance but the smell was worse here

"Jesus"The young man said shinning his flashlight all over the kitchen then stopped at the sink,the young man walked to the sink to see bugs and dirt

"Any of you guys seen a psychotic killer? He's an ugly fuck with a knife...no? Well thanks anyway"The young man searches the kitchen more then stops in front of a door 

"Let's see what's behind door number one,Bob"He opens the door and felt something touch his foot and he flinched away pointing his gun at it then shinned his flashlight only to see a hand with cuts all over it

"Hrmm"The young man looks behind him to make sure he isn't being watched before slowly walking towards the hand and kicks it then points his gun at it...it didn't move

The young man sighs and slowly opens the door still keeping his eye on the hand,when the door was open the young man shines his light only to see dead bodies maybe fifteen or twenty,some were missing limps,eyes,heads,and some even look like they've been ripped open from their chests and stomachs,all of them look like they've been in here for weeks maybe months or years but one thing was for sure,the young man's target wasn't going to be easy

"This is going to be fun*The young man said going back to the entrance and searching what used to be a living room

"Let's see"The young man looks around making sure not to miss anything

*Creeeeeeeeeeak*

The young man turned around pointing his gun in the direction of the noise...nothing

"..."He points his gun and light around him not taking any chances

*Creak*Creak*Creak*

The young man looks up and sees the ceiling move a bit

"About time"The young man silently moved towards the stairs and carefully went up the stairs'The young man reached the second floor and it was even worse than downstairs,dead rats littered the floor with the smell of rot and shit was stronger

The young man took a deep breath and walked up the hallway looking in through rooms only to find them empty 

"Hrm?"The young man sees something on the floor and picks it up,it was...ugly,it was a small toy of a boy in all green with a smile that could make anyone cringe and it's eyes weren't any better either,it looked like it was happy or...just insane,this looked like it was bought from a toy shop from hell

"Heh,These sick fucks and their toys"He puts the "Toy"down then leaves the room,the young man was about to sigh...when he felt something sharp in the side of his neck

"Hehehehe"A laugh can be heard right next to him, the young man looked at the figure in the darkness,he couldn't see who it was but he could see it's eyes,big and unblinking,they say the eyes are the window to the soul and in this person's eyes was...Madness

The young man shined his flashlight at the things face...my god did he regret it,The young man saw what looked like it came from a horror movie,A white face with big unblinking eyes...no sign of any eyelids,no nose,red lips,and a smile...his smile wasn't that of a happy person,no,it was a smile that will haunt anyone who sees it,the things lips looked like it was cut open showing his gums and teeth with a long slash in the corners of it's mouth reaching to it's ears,a smile from ear to ear is an understatement compared to this

"Jeffery Woods?"The young man said calmly

"Hehehehehe,I-I don't go by that name anymore,Hehehehehe...Now...Go.to-"

*BANG BANG BANG BANG!*

The man known as Jeffery staggers back and falls on the floor with bullet holes on his chest

"Sleep"The young man said rubbing some blood off his neck and walks to Jeffery's dead body

"Little piece of advice...never bring knife to a gun fight*The young man shined his flashlight and pointed his gun at him

"Shit...you're more ugly in person"The young man said

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!"Jeffery roared as he charged and Stabbed his knife into the young man's leg

"AHHHHH!"The young man screamed in agony and dropped his gun

"I AM BEAUTIFUL!"Jeffery Twisted the knife and made the young man fall on his back

"Guh! Son of a-AHHHHHH!"Jeffery pulled the knife out of the young man's leg

"Hehehehahaha!"Jeffery laughed as he grabbed the young man's neck with his other hand and his knife in his mouth

"Now,Hehehehe,N-Now I'm going t-to make you Hehehehahaha! B-Beautiful,Now...GO.T-Guh"The young man punched him in the face making him let go

"Kuh,if you're going to kill me just fucking kill me"The young man tried to stand but staggers because of his leg

"Hahahahahaha! I'm gonna have fun with you!"Jeffery charged at the young man with his knife ready

The young man just barley gets out of the way and was able to trip Jeffery with his good leg,Jeffery got up his smile somehow got bigger and his eyes had a look of enjoyment,Jeffery charged at the young man swinging his knife as the young man dodged the attacks but his arm was cut

"Ugh"The young man instinctively grabbed his arm in pain

Jeffery Charged at the young man bringing his knife down but he grabbed his wrist with both hands and prevented the final blow

"Hehehehehe!"Jeffery used his other hand and pulled another knife out of his pocket and stabbed the young man in the chest

"Ugh!"The young man looked at him wide eyed then at the knife in his chest

Jeffery brought his other knife back and stabbed him in the chest again pushing both his knives into his chest

"Ngh!..."The young man head butts Jeffery hard

"Ugh!"*Jeffery staggers back a bit but keeps his knives in the young man's chest

The young man head butted him again,Jeffery was seeing stars but tried to drive the knives deeper into the young man's chest 

"Get!"The young man Headbutts him hard

"The fuck!"Headbutts him again

"OFF ME!"Headbutts him hard and makes him staggers back and pulls both of his knives off the young man's chest,the young man ignored the pain and punched him in the face making him stagger more until his back hit a door,the young man grabbed Jeffery by his hoodie and punched him multiple times before punching him hard enough to break the door and sending them flying into the room

The young man uses his hands to try to push himself up but as soon as he looked up Jeffery charged at him and kicked him in the face making him fall on his back,Jeffery sat on top of the young man and punched him repeatedly laughing every time he hit him

"Hehehehahahahaha! SO FUN! COME ON! IS THIS ALL YOU GOT!? HAHAHAHAHAAHA!"Jeffery laughed like a maniac while punching the young man harder

The young man tried get up but the pain from his leg,chest,and face were getting to him,the young man felt around the floor next to him and felt something sharp...a knife,The young man grabbed the knife  and stabbed Jeffery's side 

"AHHHHHHHHHHHH!"Jeffery screamed

The young man took this chance and forced Jeffery of him and punched him in the face harder then pulls the knife out of Jeffery's side and brought it down but Jeffery stopped him by grabbing both his wrists


The young man pushed the knife down almost reaching Jeffery's chest

Jeffery screamed as the knife penetrated his chest but tried use all his strength to pull the knife out and push the young man away

"Go to sleep asshole!"The young man using his strength to push the knife deeper into Jeffery's chest

Something snapped in Jeffery's head

'go to sleep?...Go to sleep?...g-go.t-to.sl-sleep?...Go to sleep...GO TO SLEEP!'Jeffery's eyes widened"AHHHHHHHHHHHH"Jeffery kicked the young man off him 

"Shit"The young man landed on his feet and Jeffery charged at him again swinging his knife like berserker 

"die Die DIIIIIIIIIIIIIE!"Jeffery Screamed in rage swinging his knife with all his might

The young man dodged and blocks his attacks with his knife,Jeffery and the young man's knives collided and they try to push each other back with everything they have

"Ngh!"The young man was being pushed back and used what little strength he had to push Jeffery back 


"DIE DIE DIE!"Jeffery pushed the young man more,his eyes filled with blood lust

Jeffery kicked the young man's bad leg which made him struggle to stay up but after a few more kicks the young man flinched giving Jeffery the chance to push him on his back,Jeffery lunged at the young man bringing his knife down but the young man rolled out of the way making Jeffery stab the floor hard getting his knife stuck,the young man kicked Jeffery in the face hard making him stagger back and with all his strength the young man,ignoring the pain,stood up and tackled him to the floor

*Creeeeeak BANG BANG BANG*

The floor broke from under them making them fall from the second floor to the basement

"Mmm"What seemed like hours the young man woke up to see that he's surrounded by darkness,he hears the rain roar outside,he was in excruciating pain when he tried to push himself up

"Fuck"The young man looked around as best he can and saw something in the distance...his flashlight,it was blinking on and off on the floor

"Kuh"The young man with what little he had left crawled to the flashlight,as he got closer he saw eyes staring at him...they were unblinking

"Shit"The young man glared at the eyes staring back at him,he could almost see the smile getting wider and wider,the young man continue to glare at the eyes then saw what was in front of the blinking flashlight...his gun

The young man's eyes widened as he crawled to the gun still feeling the pain from the fall,Jeffery seeing what he was drawing to fall owed suit,these two no matter how much pain they were in crawled and clawed their way to the gun,the closer they got the flashlight blinked slower and as it turned off the two got closer to the gun glaring at each other as they were inches away from it

"Guh!"The young man flinched in pain as he stopped,his vision getting blurry"Fuck"The young man's vision cleared as he saw a gun barrel pointed at him

"Hehehahahahaha! N-Not my s-style but what the hell!? Hehehe! Now where were we?"Jeffery pressed the gun to the young man's forehead"Oh hehehe! I remember...Go.To.Sleep"Jeffery pulled the trigger

The flashlight died

...

The wind blew a gentle breeze as the leaves danced in the wind,a person in a hoodie,which concealed their face,walked through the gates of a cemetery,in this persons hands was a bouquet of black roses,the person walks up a hill and stops in front of a grave

"They said I'd find you here"The person said with a feminine voice laying the black roses in front of the tombstone

...

"I gotta admit...I underestimated you"The girl laughed

"Underestimating me will be the death of you"A voice said

The girl peeked behind the tombstone to see the young man sitting against the tombstone

"Heh"The girl smirked"Well,seeing as you're still alive I guess that's true"

"Hmpf"The young man stood up and looked at the girl"Not everything is as easy as it seems...especially with psychopaths like him running around"The young man said with a sigh

"Well,we live in a world where people like us exist,so anything is possible"The girl smirked"So...is it done?"The girl asked with a hint of anticipation 

The young man was quiet"Fallow me"The young man patted the the tombstone one more time before walking down the hill

"Heh"The girl looked at the young man then at the tombstone"A killer with a heart"The girl fallowed the young man leaving behind the tombstone with the name...Sally Williams

The two walked in silence towards an alley and walked into it

"This far?"The girl asked

"I'm not parking anywhere near there"The young man said with a hint of anger

The girl laughed a bit as they walked to the young man's car

"Here"The young man said with no emotion

The girl looked around the car and saw nothing,the young man lead her to the trunk and opened it...showing a man with a white face,long black hair,big eyes with no eyelids,and a gag that covers his cut open mouth

"MMMM! MMMMMM!"Jeffery struggles with the chains that are tied on his wrists and feet 

"Aw~All wrapped up and pretty like a present"The girl looked at Jeffery

"Hi Jeffy,remember me~?"The girl smiled as if she's a little girl who got a new toy

"MMMMMM! MMMMMMM!"Jeffery Glared at the girl showing more rage than before

"Hehe,but still to actually catch him and bring him alive...I'm impressed"The girl said 

The young man gives an annoyed sigh

"It wasn't easy"The young man said 

*Flashback*

"Go.to.sleep"Jeffery pulled the trigger

*Click*

"Huh?"Jeffery pulled the trigger again

*Click click click...click*

"The fuck!?"Jeffery pulled the trigger again and again but nothing happened

"Heh"The young man smirked

"Guh!"Jeffery glared at the gun and at the young man then tried to hit him with the butt of the gun 

The young man rolled away and kicked him in the face

"AHHHHH! AHHHHHHHH!"Jeffery grabbed his face in pain

The young man slowly got up and kicked him in the stomach only to feel padding"Huh?"The young man saw tearings in Jeffery's hoodie"Bulletproof armor...so that's how you're still alive"The young man kicked him in the side of his head making him roll on his back,Jeffery eyes were blurry then focused when the young man grabbed him by his hoodie and slammed him against a wall,the young man punched Jeffery in the face,then slammed his head into the wall making a hole

"Gah!"Jeffery's eyes twitched as he was brought back from the hole in the wall and punched in the face again

"You piece!"The young man punched him in the face

"Of fucking!"The young man punched him again even harder breaking some of his teeth

"SHIT!"The young man grabbed him by his hoodie and head butted him hard making his back hit the wall

"STAY DOWN!"The young man punched Jeffery through the wall making him fall on his back

"Ngh!"Jeffery was in pain,his face hurt a lot...almost like the day his face was burned making him look the way he does now,not as much but this was a close second,though being impaled by a tree branch hurt like hell too

Jeffery felt water on his face

"Huh?"Jeffery's eyes focused and saw that he was outside...it was raining

The young man walked into his line of vision and stared at the boy who used to be Jeffery Woods

"Heh...hehehehehahahahahahahaha!"Jeffery roared with laughter as the young man just stared at him

"Hehe...Ahh~that was fun"Jeffery looked at the young man his vision fading a bit"Who...who are you?"Jeffery asked as his smile grew wider

The young man didn't answer

"Hehe,strong silent type,Huh? Hehehehe,you..."Jeffery's vision was getting dark"You Sh-Should...Smile more Hehehehahahahaha!....."Jeffery laughed then passed out

The young man just stared at Jeffery or as he's known now as Jeff The Killer then dragged him to his car and put him in the trunk

*Flashback end*

"Anyway,my job is done"The young man said

"Yes it is and you brought him back alive,good job"The girl pulled an envelope out of her pocket and gave it to the young man"As promised $10,000...with a bonus

"Bonus?"The young man asked counting the money 

The girl kissed the young man on the cheek,the young man touched his cheek and looked at her surprised

"THAT kind of bonus"The girl smiled cheekily then closed the trunk and walked to the drivers seat"By the way...what's your name?"The girl said while opening the car door

"...Shawn..."The young man now known as Shawn said

"Shawn...hehe,that's a nice name"The girl smiled

"...You?..."Shawn asked

"Me?..."The girl turned her head and just barley he could see her black eyes"I'm Jane...look after yourself Shawn"The girl known as Jane drove away leaving Shawn by himself

"Hmpf"Shawn smiled a bit and walked out of the ally and went on his way

As Jane drove she couldn't help but think about what just transpired 

'Shawn,Huh?...Maybe the legends are true"Jane smiled'I wonder how "HE" will react...hehe,please keep this interesting...Shawn the immortal'Jane thought smiling more

*Mansion*

Three figures can be seen inside the mansion looking at the damage

"What a mess"

"Jeff did always make a mess but to actually lose..."

"Huh,so Jeff was beaten?"

"Yes...by the one named Shawn"

"I see"

"Should we deal with him?"

"Not until master gives us the okay"

"Understood"

"I-I say we deal with this son of a b-bitch"

"Calm down,we need to-"

The three kneeled at the same time,the three stayed like that before one them raising their head

"Yes,m-master I will d-deal with him"He stood up and walked away...his hatchets moving form every step he takes 
 
All our lives
We're filled with so much information
ABC's
Multiplication tables
read,write,read,write/question/question/question

As a kid we'd celebrate that day
that supposedly amazing day.
to praise him for his "accomplishments"
is nothing but an insult to those who lost their lives
question/question

We thank him for all he's done as if praising a monster
we were given the fairytale version when we were kids
question/question
we were given the "happy ending" we all want
but years later we learn the truth/question/question

He raped and killed innocent people to get what he wanted
question/question/who is this monster?
his name is like poison every time I speak its name
and when I write his name on a piece of paper or type his name for a report
I erase or delete his name as if doing so will make him disappear/erased from existence

question/question/who is this monster?
This monster isn't under your bed or in the closet waiting to eat you
This monster is well known but not as we were taught
question/question/
His name is known under a word that spits in the face of people who earned it...Hero
who is this monster?/question/question
His name...his name is...










Christopher Columbus
Fan girls like Jeff for two reasons and I've noticed it in most of the comments about his story 1)he was bullied and we all know how that is a serious topic but fan girls just treat it as a trope called "Woobie" a character who had a hard life and his story makes you feel sorry for that character that fans pair themselves with them being that"Special person"that can "save him" and become that one person that is most important to them and they would do anything for them*Cough*Marysue*Cough* 2) All fan art(mainly the yaoi)nuff said but here's my problem with the story,when fans read the part where he gets bullied that's the only thing they care about,seriously the fact that he killed his entire family is completely ignored because he was bullied even though he fought back and wasn't under any suffering,seriously we don't know anything about Jeff's character before he went crazy,what was he like? Since he can fight does that mean he grew up in a bad neighborhood? What does he look like?(I know the fan art but in the original story we get no descriptions of who he is but we are suppose to accept that he just went crazy for no reason!)These questions are never answered in the original story and the only thing we know is he's a killer and the picture is the only thing we have to tell what he looks like but these don't matter all that matters to the fan girls is that he was bullied and that's it,bullying can lead to murder and even psychological issues but that doesn't explain why he cares so much about being"Beautiful"(And I will never get how someone can look at him and say he's "beautiful" "sexy" "cute" fan girls ugh!)We never take a look inside his head and get explained why he does what he does well okay you could say he was just insane but it's so rushed that it seems to me the author just wanted to end the story as soon as possible,the story is just a mess that could have been better and had potential but what really bothers me is that Fan girls like this guy who killed his entire family! Did they forget that!? Then again someone defended him by saying"He was bullied so killing his family was understandable"I mean really!? It's a fandom I get it you can do whatever you want with that but with all the fans of Slenderman trying to kill their friends and families just to be with him it truly frightens me that one day a fan of Jeff will kill their family just to be like Jeff or Try to actually look like Jeff,soon we'll hear on the news that some idiot tried to cut a smile into their face and try to cut or burn their eyelids and their body is found dead with all these fatal cuts...Children read these kinds of stories and parents don't tell them the difference between fiction and reality but even then these kids idolize these FAKE characters and go out there to get their "attention"...I'm really scared that some idiot will do something to hurt someone in the name of these characters...two kids planned to murder their friend and stabbed her then left her in the woods to die...A girl burned her house down with her mother and baby brother in it and they both wanted to go to Slenderman's mansion,I'm glad that these people survived but I believe that these kids need some serious help and the fact that this happened once might mean it'll happen again,I love Creepypasta but I hate what some fans do when they read these stories...2015...here's hoping these idiots get a little smarter and the parents get more involved because shit like this shouldn't happen...it shouldn't but I know there are fans that enjoy these stories for entertainment and write their own stories based on these characters(Like myself one with Sally and the other Jeff)I just hope no one else will get hurt because of these stories and live in reality and parents make time for their kids so they won't end up like those fucking idiots! Live in reality people it'll save your life But this is my opinion
Fan girls like Jeff for two reasons and I've noticed it in most of the comments about his story 1)he was bullied and we all know how that is a serious topic but fan girls just treat it as a trope called "Woobie" a character who had a hard life and his story makes you feel sorry for that character that fans pair themselves with them being that"Special person"that can "save him" and become that one person that is most important to them and they would do anything for them*Cough*Marysue*Cough* 2) All fan art(mainly the yaoi)nuff said but here's my problem with the story,when fans read the part where he gets bullied that's the only thing they care about,seriously the fact that he killed his entire family is completely ignored because he was bullied even though he fought back and wasn't under any suffering,seriously we don't know anything about Jeff's character before he went crazy,what was he like? Since he can fight does that mean he grew up in a bad neighborhood? What does he look like?(I know the fan art but in the original story we get no descriptions of who he is but we are suppose to accept that he just went crazy for no reason!)These questions are never answered in the original story and the only thing we know is he's a killer and the picture is the only thing we have to tell what he looks like but these don't matter all that matters to the fan girls is that he was bullied and that's it,bullying can lead to murder and even psychological issues but that doesn't explain why he cares so much about being"Beautiful"(And I will never get how someone can look at him and say he's "beautiful" "sexy" "cute" fan girls ugh!)We never take a look inside his head and get explained why he does what he does well okay you could say he was just insane but it's so rushed that it seems to me the author just wanted to end the story as soon as possible,the story is just a mess that could have been better and had potential but what really bothers me is that Fan girls like this guy who killed his entire family! Did they forget that!? Then again someone defended him by saying"He was bullied so killing his family was understandable"I mean really!? It's a fandom I get it you can do whatever you want with that but with all the fans of Slenderman trying to kill their friends and families just to be with him it truly frightens me that one day a fan of Jeff will kill their family just to be like Jeff or Try to actually look like Jeff,soon we'll hear on the news that some idiot tried to cut a smile into their face and try to cut or burn their eyelids and their body is found dead with all these fatal cuts...Children read these kinds of stories and parents don't tell them the difference between fiction and reality but even then these kids idolize these FAKE characters and go out there to get their "attention"...I'm really scared that some idiot will do something to hurt someone in the name of these characters...two kids planned to murder their friend and stabbed her then left her in the woods to die...A girl burned her house down with her mother and baby brother in it and they both wanted to go to Slenderman's mansion,I'm glad that these people survived but I believe that these kids need some serious help and the fact that this happened once might mean it'll happen again,I love Creepypasta but I hate what some fans do when they read these stories...2015...here's hoping these idiots get a little smarter and the parents get more involved because shit like this shouldn't happen...it shouldn't but I know there are fans that enjoy these stories for entertainment and write their own stories based on these characters(Like myself one with Sally and the other Jeff)I just hope no one else will get hurt because of these stories and live in reality and parents make time for their kids so they won't end up like those fucking idiots! Live in reality people it'll save your life But this is my opinion

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You shall be on my ID. XD If you want. :meow:
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Er, I mean the custom box with all my peeps in it. XDD Whoops.
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner 21 hours ago  Hobbyist Writer
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Thanks for the fave~
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I'm just wondering.. do you play warframe? :D
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No but I like the designs and weapons,excalibur is my favorite
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Thanks for the watch. 
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Hrm...well we have been talking for while so...yeah
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