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Last Moment With Dashie by BlackGryph0n

Say whatever you want about My little pony"It's girly,it's for kids,brony this,brony that"I have to say fuck those people cause if a sh...


Where do I start? This story is...stupid,laughably bad,and most of all disappointing in my opinion because...wow,okay so Jane was creat...

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I don't know what to say about thism.youtube.com/watch?v=QV3nCiGR… well just three words Ahem! FUCK THIS BITCH! So sitting in a waiting room is harassment? Waiting to get help in collage from your advisor is harassment!? Are you fucking kidding me!? And from what i've read about other students experiences in this school it's clear these people don't give a fuck about their students only getting their pay checks hell this bitch is obviously insane cause really how can waiting for help harassment? He needed help and he waited patiently also no matter how stupid this woman was acting the guy kept his cool,I heard him laugh a bit at the end cause he knows this is bullshit,we all know this is bullshit! I'm not sure if she is racist(The student was black),a feminazi,or just a fucking idiot bitch who doesn't care! I'm going with the last one and the security guards kicked him out of the room...I bet that they didn't even ask what he did...I've seen how lazy and fucking stupid security guards in school are! Like this one time in high school I was late so I went through the front door got my belt off and took out keys and put them in my book bag so I can go through the metal detector(Yes my school has that)so I see this woman behind the desk who's a security guard and she's by herself and she sees me so I wait for her to start the machine so I can get to class but then she did something that just made me want to scream WTF!? Instead of turning on the machine she calls me over to her and she asks me..."Do you have any weapons?"...screw it WHAT THE FUCK WAS THAT!? DO I HAVE ANY WEAPONS!? I swear to everything I love that this actually happened and it still bugs the crap out of me! Instead of getting up and watching my bag go through the x-Ray and see if the detector beeped when I walked through it she just asks me if I have any weapons...I said no then she just lets me go to class...WHAT!? She trusted me on my word that I didn't have any weapons(Which I didn't by the way)what if I did and she just let me through on my word!? I could have had a gun in my bag for all she knows and students could have been hurt and killed because she couldn't get her lazy ass off her chair! I don't on know if she was fired but goddammit I hope she was! Another time I saw security guard stupidity was when I entered the school and heard the security guards talking while looking at the x-Ray screen and I heard them saying things like"Look see that? That was in her bag"another security guard said"Ah! She could have stashed it by now"Now I don't know if it was just a phone or something else but how the fuck can they miss that!? Hell what if it was a gun!? Or a knife!? Fucking pay attention you idiots! Fucking hell! Anyway fuck this bitch and fuck these lazy good for nothing security guards that don't know how to do their fucking job!
Huh...I don't know where to start...I mean here's this guy that sees a girl crying and he tries to help her(That's good,finally someone who isn't the creepypasta monster isn't an asshole)But why didn't he call the police? I mean if she said she is lost shouldn't he just call the police so they can find her parents? Also what kind of kid asks what an adult does for a living? Kids don't talk like that or even know what a bar is,I mean sure she isn't normal but the author knows she isn't normal and so do we cause of the title"little girl slender"honestly I was expecting slender being a little girl tricking people into going into the woods to kill them but instead we have slender's daughter and that is something to write about,a mythical and powerful being has a kid sometimes the kid is more powerful than their powerful parent but back to the story,it feels rushed and unfinished,I mean why did slender's daughter bring him into the woods if she wasn't going to kill him? Also how can slender lose track of his kid if he can teleport or sense her or something? I thought she was just going to trick him into going into the woods to kill him but she doesn't,she brings him into the woods,finds her father,then knocks dave out,teleports him to his house,and then burns the bar down killing three people we haven't met or established they even exist...was this revenge? No it isn't he tells her what he does for a living and she or slender burns it down but for what? Were those three that were killed assholes to Dave? If that were the case the story didn't say anything about that,was it to mess with Dave? Maybe slender's daughter did this as a "prank"maybe? Also why did slender spare him? I guess it's a request from his daughter but why would she let him live? Helping her get home? Like I said its established that slender can teleport and sense where people are so why didn't he just find her instantly? And how is burning the bar down going to help him? Is it horrible there? Does he get bullied? Someone scratched his car? None of this is explained! The story is in and out the door with nothing explained or accomplished and even if the burning of the bar is a good thing it isn't explained how it's a good thing or how it helps Dave,now he has to find another job and if that was the "help" she meant like I said it isn't explained why the bar needed to be burned down! Maybe she knew that the bar was going to catch fire but why tell him not to go to work if you're going to send him home unconscious an hour after the fire started? Why not just let him go home and then he thinks about what she said,he then decides not to go to work and then gets the phone call about the fire,it still wouldn't make sense why slender couldn't just find her but at least that wouldn't make what she said pointless*Sigh*In my opinion this story isn't good,it's maddening how many questions go unanswered and how little to nothing is explained...I'm sure the author tried their best but really this story is too rushed and unfinished
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Facts about meJ


1)I love rock music
2)I love spicey food(even though it doesn't like me XD)
3)I eat pizza everyday(yet I don't get fat...weird)
4)Linkin park is the first rock band I loved
5)I hate naruto-_-
6)I'm shy in real life but an asshole when you get to know me...you know in a good way
7)X-box 360 is my favorite system(but I love other systems if given the chance to play them)
8)I had asthma for many years and it was a bitch to have
9)I hate religion but you can believe whatever you want it's your right as a human being just don't force your religion and beliefs on me and Ataganize me for disagreeing with you
10)I love constructive criticism on my stories,I might consider being a writer but I don't know


QUESTIONS 
1.) Public school, private school or homeschool? 
Public school(Yet I wish I was homeschooledTT_TT)
2.) Favorite candy? 
Anything good
3.) What's your worst fear? 
Being forced to watch the twilight saga and 50 shades of grey
4.) What's something you're not scared of, even though you probably should be? 
Heights
5.) Who did you talk with last? 
Don't remember
6.) Kittens or puppies? 
I guess both if they like meTT.TT and are potty trained-_-
7.) What's your favorite moment from a show or anime? 
When I saw Gohan beat cell in dragon ball z
8.) When you like someone, do you keep it hidden, hint at it, or flat out tell them? 
Keep it hidden
9.) What's your preferred drawing method? (Traditional or Digital?) 
I can't draw for shit TT.TT
10.) How much older are you than me? (I'm 16.) 
4 years older than you

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My questions
1)If you had a super power what would it be?
2)Sneakers or boots?
3)If you could punch one celebrity in the face who would it be? And why?
4)Summer or winter?
5)If you could visit one place in the entire world where would it be?
6)Left handed or right handed?
7)Five nights at FREEDY'S or outlast?
8)If you could change your hair to any color what would it be?
9)If you had the power to end one show forever which would it be? And why?
10)Worst movie you ever saw and why?

So I was watching a video from Mrrepzion and he was responding to a video called"My family raped me"and I thought that this video was going to be serious but when I actually saw the video he was responding to...I...Uh...well see for yourselfm.youtube.com/watch?v=oWaCMel2… 
I don't know what to say about thism.youtube.com/watch?v=QV3nCiGR… well just three words Ahem! FUCK THIS BITCH! So sitting in a waiting room is harassment? Waiting to get help in collage from your advisor is harassment!? Are you fucking kidding me!? And from what i've read about other students experiences in this school it's clear these people don't give a fuck about their students only getting their pay checks hell this bitch is obviously insane cause really how can waiting for help harassment? He needed help and he waited patiently also no matter how stupid this woman was acting the guy kept his cool,I heard him laugh a bit at the end cause he knows this is bullshit,we all know this is bullshit! I'm not sure if she is racist(The student was black),a feminazi,or just a fucking idiot bitch who doesn't care! I'm going with the last one and the security guards kicked him out of the room...I bet that they didn't even ask what he did...I've seen how lazy and fucking stupid security guards in school are! Like this one time in high school I was late so I went through the front door got my belt off and took out keys and put them in my book bag so I can go through the metal detector(Yes my school has that)so I see this woman behind the desk who's a security guard and she's by herself and she sees me so I wait for her to start the machine so I can get to class but then she did something that just made me want to scream WTF!? Instead of turning on the machine she calls me over to her and she asks me..."Do you have any weapons?"...screw it WHAT THE FUCK WAS THAT!? DO I HAVE ANY WEAPONS!? I swear to everything I love that this actually happened and it still bugs the crap out of me! Instead of getting up and watching my bag go through the x-Ray and see if the detector beeped when I walked through it she just asks me if I have any weapons...I said no then she just lets me go to class...WHAT!? She trusted me on my word that I didn't have any weapons(Which I didn't by the way)what if I did and she just let me through on my word!? I could have had a gun in my bag for all she knows and students could have been hurt and killed because she couldn't get her lazy ass off her chair! I don't on know if she was fired but goddammit I hope she was! Another time I saw security guard stupidity was when I entered the school and heard the security guards talking while looking at the x-Ray screen and I heard them saying things like"Look see that? That was in her bag"another security guard said"Ah! She could have stashed it by now"Now I don't know if it was just a phone or something else but how the fuck can they miss that!? Hell what if it was a gun!? Or a knife!? Fucking pay attention you idiots! Fucking hell! Anyway fuck this bitch and fuck these lazy good for nothing security guards that don't know how to do their fucking job!

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mimimamdy Featured By Owner 3 days ago
Theres frieza everywhere in DBZ (is real and funny) once my cousin watch DBZ frieze is everywhere I sawed it too
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Must have been good ^_^
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mimimamdy Featured By Owner 3 days ago
I adore frieza he s so funny
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I liked his fight with Goku on namik 
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Chuck-K Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for the video game Pin-Up Art Fav!!! More to come soon :)
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
No prob! ^_^ looking forward to seeing more!
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bignando Featured By Owner May 14, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks  for all faves  !!!
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner May 14, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
No prob! Supergirl is awesome and hot!
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bignando Featured By Owner May 15, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks
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Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner May 15, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
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